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"Diagnosis Fear" by Patricia M. DŽAngelo

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This is a flash fiction piece for all of you that like short short stories. It is only 413 words in length.
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DIAGNOSIS FEAR

By Trish D’Angelo




She shifted uneasily in her seat, trying to get comfortable, trying to concentrate. She leafed through the pages of Bird, Bee, and Flower. ‘If you thought roses sweet, then…’ Her eyes shifted to her child, as he happily played with his Captain Mantis Soldier. A glimmer of fear shadowed her face as she flashed a weak smile towards her young son. Realizing she was close to tears, she quickly averted her gaze back to the blurring words. ‘If you thought roses sweet, then you will be…”

There had to be an explanation for the behavior. Normal children just didn’t act that way. He was over five years old now, and no matter how badly she wished to blame it on not knowing any better, she knew she was grasping at excuses. Unable to focus she closed the pages and ticked across her fingers as she mentally counted all the healers she had dragged her son. Some barely qualified as more than witch doctors, with their herbal remedies, and strange potions. She swallowed hard, for she knew hope dangled on a thin thread. All hinted at the same word, a word she only wished to drive from her brain. It haunted her every waking hour. Anthropophobia.

“Fae Brownie”

Fae jumped to her feet, dropping the magazine to the floor, hiding toes that seemed rooted to the spot. This last battery of tests was court ordered. So sure of the diagnosis, so sure of the outcome, she actually debated not bringing him. Reaching down she uncurled his little fingers and placed a gentle kiss. “Come,“ she whispered. Trying to hide the panic she forced a level, almost cold tone to her voice. A harried finger brushed away the small tear that slid down her cheek. When the Doctor came gliding into view, she ran to him and grabbed his hands. Expectant eyes pleaded against hope. “Well… “

He shook his head. “He doesn’t have Anthropophobia.”

She fell to her knees with a loud sigh dying against the silence of the pronouncement. Looking up she finally whispered, “Where will he be locked away?”

“Ms. Brownie, its for the good of the colony. Too many times he’s just popped out into the midst of them as if he wanted to play. All fairies must fear people. Should we be discovered, our lives as we know it would be over. Remember, sometimes its what we don’t fear that can get us into trouble.”

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16 Oct 2007:-) Deborah Cullins Smith
YAAAAY! **does a first comment jig**

Beautiful work, Trish! I love the twist -- as your stories always deliver! What a sweet piece of flash fiction!

Well done, my friend, well done!

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "Thanks!! One thing, I found out especially after the last project is just how hard flash fiction really is. "
18 Nov 2007:-) Joelle Duran
That was a great, tight little piece, and I had fun picking at the word 'Anthopophobia' in my head and trying to guess where you were headed. I think you brought across that poor mother's feelings quite well.

(Don't mind me, I just wandered over from Sarah Kinder's page.)

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "I had fun with this piece. I found a website with a list of phobias. They must have a name for everything. Glad to have you stop by from Sara's page. You're welcome to wander in any time. Always have a pot of coffee on. Cream or sugar?"
25 Jul 2008:-) Dave Cripps
LOL poor little chap! Locked away for not being afraid! Surely a quick bit of magic and he’s a human child with no idea who he really is. Then it may have run into more words and become an epic. 12


:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "That does sound like an epic. LOL I’ve already got a couple epics keeping me busy, last thing I need is another one."
31 Aug 2008:-) Melissa "Bee" Stephan
Wow, this is very powerful and osrt of sad. Poor little guy, I hope he’s okay.

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "Glad you enjoyed it. Another short you might like that has a touch of sadness to it, is Dream Weaver. It even has a link to a picture that was used for the inspiration for the story."
6 Sep 2008:-) Sarah-amy haley
Oooh, intresting, kept it unexpected until the end...
I really liked it, it came across very real and the sadness at the end was brilliant.
Cool litte story!!1

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "I’m glad you enjoyed the tale."
9 Oct 2008:-) Ian Plumb
This is a very clever piece -- well done! "...the pages of Bird, Bee, and Flower..."? That made me laugh the second time through the story. This story also made me think -- it wouldn’t be that long before her son could be taught the correct behaviour. A nicely woven tale.

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "Glad this made you laugh. It was a nice light-hearted piece."
8 Apr 2009:-) Kelsey M. Graham
*is starting to really enjoy flash fiction*
And I’d been thinking that she was afraid he had anthropophobia- you got us all good. Hmm, I’m curious to see what will become of this fearless little fairy...
Although... "Fae Brownie" is a rather obvious name, isn’t it?

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "Glad you’re enjoying the flash fiction. They are a nice change of pace.

It’s fun to go to some of the web sites and see just how many types of phobias there are. It’s quite the list.

I need to think of a name besides Fae Brownie that isn’t quite so obvious, yet still serves as a clue to the direction of the story. If you have an idea let me know."
24 Apr 2009:-) Elizabeth S Hanninen
Interesting short. A friend of mine wrote almost strictly flash fiction pieces for a while. Her’s were mostly horror. I enjoy the genre, though writing it is another matter. I don’t even try to write flash chapters unless I’m set on it.

:-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo replies: "One might think that flash fiction would be easy, but when you have to keep it short you really have to be careful to make every word count. Hence, it’s not my favorite form of writing either. However, it’s fun to challenge one’s self every once in awhile."
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About 'Diagnosis Fear':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Patricia M. DŽAngelo
 • Copyright: ©Patricia M. DŽAngelo. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Fairy, Fairy mother
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries
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